2011年6月9日 星期四
Discussing effects-1
Many people drink coffee to stimulate themselves every day. However, according to the opinion of experts, drinking too much coffee may have negative effects on our health. Firstly, you may suffer from insomnia every night and that you will be low-spirited next day, which makes you be unable to focus on your work. In addition, you could feel your heart beats fast or irregularly if you drink more than four cups of coffee. Supposing that you don’t go to see a doctor for a treatment, it might become a serious heart disease. Moreover, heavy caffeine would make gastrointestinal problems that causes you feel nausea or have a stomachache. To sum up, never drink too much coffee a day, or it will be harm to your health.
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In addition, you could feel your heart beats fast or irregularly if you drink more than four cups of coffee.這句後面應該再加上~of coffee a day或其他的時間~因為四杯的量應該有個屬於他極限的時間才對
回覆刪除其他的部分我覺得都規規矩矩XDDD
However, according to the opinion of experts, drinking too much coffee may have negative effects on our health.因為裡面有咖啡因,我覺得要提到咖啡因唷,畢竟不是"咖啡"不好,是"咖啡因" xD
回覆刪除結尾:it will be(我知道do是對的,be不知道唷xD) harm to your health
人稱要統一喔~
回覆刪除妳的句子有些是第一人稱有些是第二人稱~
To sum up, never drink too much coffee a day, or it will be harm to your health.
是harm for八=)
論點有點少喔~還有你的結論句感覺每次都很倉促的結束xd
回覆刪除feel your heart beats fast
回覆刪除-->feel your heart beating fast
causes you feel nausea or have a stomachache
--> causes you to feel nausea or to have a stomachache
恩~結束~
spporting ideas 可以多一點喔
回覆刪除大致上還算不錯:>>>
feel your heart beats fast
回覆刪除>> feel your heart beating fast
沒什麼錯誤@@~