2011年6月1日 星期三
Discussing Cause-1
I've decided to major in English for some reasons. To begin with, English is my favorite subject. When I was a junior high school student, my teacher always encourged me to answer questions in English. Even I gave a wrong answer, she would ask me to try again instead of blaming me and that's why I am interested in learning English . In addition, English is an international language. If I can speak English fluently, I will be able to communicate with foreigners without an interpreter, and that I can travel to other countries alone. Most importantly, learning a new language can improve my competitiveness and it has a great help in my career. To sum up, it's for all the above-mentioned reasons that I made this decision.
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這篇也太學以至用了喔= =
回覆刪除建議改一些地方~
像是把一些句子改寫...
my teacher always encourged me to answer questions in English.
=>my teacher always encourged me to behave myself in English such as answering some questions or doing self-introduction.
像這樣把句子改一改就會很優ㄛ><
同上+1
回覆刪除雖然老師都說叫我們要多多利用句型~
只是這次你的句子會不會有點太....
畢竟文章還是以原創為佳喔><
整體就是非常的順暢~~~~
回覆刪除沒什麼大問題,樓上的建議還不錯:D
, and that I can travel to
回覆刪除不用that~
蠻順的~最後一句可以再加一些自己的想法
improve my competitiveness
回覆刪除增加你的競爭力 什麼競爭力 哪方面的? 我覺得這裡比較偏中文的感覺啦 看要不要再附註一下:>
然後你這次的百分百應該背得滿熟的齁XDDD
improve my competitiveness
回覆刪除提高我的競爭力?
我覺得改成提高能力會比較好
然後看到椿茱的回覆讓我很想笑
BTY 結論句好短唷唷唷唷唷~可以多加一點想法~
麥可可以在每一個論點後面加一些自己的想法唷
回覆刪除不要太侷限在課本上給的線索~加油
I can speak English fluently, I will be able to communicate with foreigners without an interpreter, and that I can travel to other countries alone.
回覆刪除>>>不用that
很順暢
加油:>>>