2011年5月25日 星期三

Expressing an Opinion-2

  Recently, the authority suggests building the forth nuclear power station in Taipei. Though some people say that using nuclear produce less air pollution, I think that the nuclear waste will pollute the environment if it doesn’t be saved carefully. Some people point out that we can spend less money if we use nuclear power to generate electric power. However, it is more and more difficult to find a place to put the nuclear waste. Moreover, nuclear power could be dangerous if we use it carelessly or when natural disasters happen. To sum up, it is for all the above-mentioned reasons that I believe we should not use nuclear power too much.

7 則留言:

  1. the authority suggests building the forth nuclear power station in Taipei.
    這句怪怪的喔 suggests 後面怎麼直接接building?

    be saved carefully// saved -> disposed

    這篇的有些字連結處不太通欸
    痾...這篇不知道要給什麼欸 就這樣吧!

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  2. 沒什麼錯誤~

    但是也沒有很正確的論點,我覺得整體很沒力~。。~

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  3. 沒什麼大錯誤

    只不過可以再多一點例證 :>

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  4. 論點可以再多舉幾個喔~
    然後沒有什麼錯誤
    還有那些什麼報導指出那個用得很棒~有論文的feel:))
    感覺真的把資料來源找出來了
    可惜寫太少~

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  5. Recently, the authority suggests building the forth nuclear power station in Taipei.
    起頭用例證~
    很不錯!!!

    其他的列點也能嘗試用些補充~
    讓文章篇幅更加充實=)

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  6. Though some people say that using nuclear produce less air pollution,
    -->Though some people say that using nuclear produces less air pollution,

    感覺上好像可以在多補充些內容~不然好快就看完了~

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  7. 整篇文章節奏很快但是論點很明顯的不夠有力~
    應該在每個點後再加上一句至兩句說明~
    這樣讀起來才會比較有說服力><
    不然的話整篇文章讀起來有點弱~
    這篇文章的缺點不是文法或什麼的~而是整篇的豐富度的問題
    加油喔=))

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