I am an optimistic girl, who always looks on the bright side. Nevertheless, I was shy when I was a little girl. I think that it is because I am the only child in my family and there is no one I can talk to except for my parents, so I seldom interacted with others on my own initiative; but , I become more and more active with age. Though I still feel a little uneasy when I come to a new environment, I am livelier now than I used to be.
As to my hobbies, I usually read novels or listening to music after I finish my homework. Moreover, I can learn some English vocabulary when I listening to English songs or reading an English novel. What’s more, since my father often took me to play basketball or went jogging when I was an elementary school student, doing exercise has also been one of my hobbies. And I usually play volleyball, basketball or go jogging with my classmates after school. In addition, my junior high school teacher said, “Though it is important to study hard, we can’t study all the time without proper rest.” So, I balance my study time and my leisure time and it is also the way I release my pressure.
When it comes to my attitude toward life, I think that whatever I do, I should carry out an undertaking from start to finish and never give up easily. Moreover, I believe that there is nothing that can’t be solved, which is also related to my maxim “Never give up.” As the proverb goes, “No pains, no gains.” After all, the way to reach my goal is just to try hard.
“Though it is important to study hard, we can’t study all the time without proper rest.” (((讚)))哈
回覆刪除整個很順,我覺得沒什麼問題唷:) 九登進步了欸xDD
I am an optimistic girl, who always looks on the bright side.
回覆刪除為什麼要逗號?
I was shy when I was a little girl.-->現在還是呀~
這句的分段好長而且怪怪的 有because又有so
~. As a result, I seldom interacted with others on my own initiative,and now I have become more and more active with age.
As to--> As for
I usually read novels or listening -->I usually read novels or listen
同樣的錯again~~
when I listening to -->when I listen to English songs or read
So, I balance my study time and my leisure time and it is also the way I release my pressure-->這句很棒耶!!
這篇說了好多興趣唷~感覺是個很會運動的女生!!
不過結尾感覺可以再改更好一點 好倉卒的收尾
第四行的but應該是連接詞吧 不用分號喔
回覆刪除reading an English novel 用複數比較好
on my own initiative 這個辭真好
麥可這篇寫的好:D
我覺得妳可以先寫
回覆刪除I was shy when I was a little girl.
再寫
I am an optimistic girl, who always looks on the bright side.
並且寫出說為妳甚麼會變這樣~~~
第二段很不錯~~~
我覺得很豐富=)))
整體來看十分不錯~~
但第一段的接觸新環境的地方~
可以在多做些說明=)))