2011年9月6日 星期二
Family Background
My name is Lin, Er-ya. There are three members in my family. My father is a worker at a company in Tainan . He is a cautious person, and he is a man of his word. I learn from him that I have to treat other people cordial and be a responsible person. My mother is a career woman. She works at a department store in Tainan . Since I was a little child, she taught me that it’s all right if I do something wrong, the most important thing is that I have to admit my mistake honestly and correct it. Moreover, I’m born in a double-income family and I don’t have any brother or sister, so I learn to be independent at an early age. As to my schoolwork, my parents never put too much pressure on me. They just hope that I can try my best in my studies. Therefore, in the process of learning, I can develop freely and find my interests.
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我覺得你描述爸爸和從他身上學到的事好像沒什麼關聯
回覆刪除Since I was a little child, she taught me that it’s all right if I do something wrong, the most important thing is that I have to admit my mistake honestly and correct it.
since逗號後面那句要完成式
然後最後一句少連接詞
I’m born -->過去式唷
我覺得你寫的還不錯欸,整體看下來不會卡卡、很順暢,阿!是很順拉不是順暢xD
回覆刪除尤其是後面:
Moreover, I’m born in a double-income family and I don’t have any brother or sister, so I learn to be independent at an early age.
my parents never put too much pressure on me
Therefore, I can develop freely and find my interests.
這兩個部分我喜歡~
since 那邊記得改完成式
回覆刪除你可以在你沒有任何兄弟姊妹那裡加上
因為這樣所以 你爸媽全心全意的照顧你
你爸爸很謹慎小心,然後呢?你受他什麼影響呢
然後 應該差不多了
and he is a man of his word.
回覆刪除這句有點文言= =
可以試試別的用語=)
Moreover, I’m born in a double-income family
這句應該要放在前面的部分~
而下一句則可和There are three members in my family.
這句作結合=)))
有寫到父母影響妳甚麼=)))
很棒喔~~~