2011年9月6日 星期二

Family Background

  My name is Lin, Er-ya. There are three members in my family. My father is a worker at a company in Tainan. He is a cautious person, and he is a man of his word. I learn from him that I have to treat other people cordial and be a responsible person. My mother is a career woman. She works at a department store in Tainan. Since I was a little child, she taught me that it’s all right if I do something wrong, the most important thing is that I have to admit my mistake honestly and correct it. Moreover, I’m born in a double-income family and I don’t have any brother or sister, so I learn to be independent at an early age. As to my schoolwork, my parents never put too much pressure on me. They just hope that I can try my best in my studies. Therefore, in the process of learning, I can develop freely and find my interests.

4 則留言:

  1. 我覺得你描述爸爸和從他身上學到的事好像沒什麼關聯
    Since I was a little child, she taught me that it’s all right if I do something wrong, the most important thing is that I have to admit my mistake honestly and correct it.
    since逗號後面那句要完成式
    然後最後一句少連接詞

    I’m born -->過去式唷

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  2. 我覺得你寫的還不錯欸,整體看下來不會卡卡、很順暢,阿!是很順拉不是順暢xD

    尤其是後面:
    Moreover, I’m born in a double-income family and I don’t have any brother or sister, so I learn to be independent at an early age.

    my parents never put too much pressure on me
    Therefore, I can develop freely and find my interests.
    這兩個部分我喜歡~

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  3. since 那邊記得改完成式

    你可以在你沒有任何兄弟姊妹那裡加上
    因為這樣所以 你爸媽全心全意的照顧你

    你爸爸很謹慎小心,然後呢?你受他什麼影響呢

    然後 應該差不多了

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  4. and he is a man of his word.
    這句有點文言= =
    可以試試別的用語=)

    Moreover, I’m born in a double-income family
    這句應該要放在前面的部分~
    而下一句則可和There are three members in my family.
    這句作結合=)))

    有寫到父母影響妳甚麼=)))
    很棒喔~~~

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