Explaining a Process-3

  In order to get from the Visitor Center to the Graff House, follow these directions. First, go one block from Visitor Center. Then, turn left on

Chestnut Street

. And continue five blocks on

Chestnut Street

. Graff House is on your right.

Explaining a Process-2

  We can prove that black is a better collector of solar energy than white through an experiment. All we need are 2 tin cans, black and white paint and a room thermometer. First, paint the cans─one black, one white. Then, fill the cans with water. Next, put the cans in direct sunlight for three hours. After that, check the temperature of the water in the black cans and compare. And you will see that the temperature of the water in the black can is higher. This shows that black collects more solar energy than white.

Explaining a Process-1

  It is easy to pot a plant if you follow the right procedure. First, cover bottom of pot with small stones. Then, put two inches of soil on the top of rocks. Next, make a hole in center of soil. Later, drop plant into soil. After that, add soil until it almost reaches top of pot. And then press soil down with thumbs. Last, water the plant. Following these steps, then you can make the plant thrive.

A terrible day-revised 1

  I believed that today is really not my day. Yesterday, I had a lot of homework to do. And it was past midnight when I finished my homework. Because of staying up late last night, I overslept and was late for school this morning. When I got to school, I found that I didn't bring my homework. Furthermore, I was so tired that I felt sleepy in class and that kept me from focusing on what the teacher said. Worst of all, I forgot that there would be a test in the afternoon, however, I didn't prepare for it. As a result, I failed the test. In addition to being scolded by my teacher, I was asked to retake the exam tomorrow. I think that today is a terrible day for me.

A terrible day

  I had a really bad day today. Yesterday, I had a lot of homework to do. And it was past midnight when I finished my homework. Because of staying up late last night, I overslept and was late for school this morning. When I got to school, I found that I didn’t bring my homework. Furthermore, I was so tired that I felt sleepy in class, which kept me from focusing on what the teacher said. Worst of all, I forgot that there would be a test while I didn't prepare for it. As a result, I failed the test. In addition to be scolded by my teacher, I was asked to retake the exam tomorrow. I think that today is a terrible day for me.

Athlete-revised 1

  David, who was an excellent athlete, used to win many awards in race. Unfortunately, he had his leg broken in a car accident. And he was hurt so badly that he had to have his leg amputated. At first, he was very upset and the thought that his athletic career would come to an end was keeping going round and round in his mind. With his family and friends’ encouragement, he rebounded from the state of depression. After he was released from the hospital, he started practicing running and hoped that he himself could participate in the race again. Five years later, he participated in the race as what he had hoped. To everyone’s surprise, he won first award. Although he was disabled, his efforts were finally crowned with success. I think that his spirit deserves our praise.

Athlete

  David, who was an excellent athlete, used to won the award in race. Unfortunately, he had his leg broken in a car accident. And it was hurt badly, so he had to have his leg amputated. At first, he was very upset while the thought that his athletic career would come to an end keeping going round and round in his mind. With his family’s and friends’ encouragement, he rebounded from the state of depression. After he was released from the hospital, he started practicing running and hoped himself could entered the race again. Five years later, he entered the race as he wishes. To everyone’s surprised, he won first award. Although he is disabled, his efforts were finally crowned with success. I think that his spirit deserves our praise.